The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
The line graph demonstrates the average figure for UK passengers travelling daily by
car
bus
or
train
from 1970 to 2030
Overall
,
it is clear that
car
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the car
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was the most popular way among
people
in
UK
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the UK
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throughout the period shown.
Also
,
while
the number of commuters who use
train
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the train
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is
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as
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the main vehicle
tend
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tends
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to
rose
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rise
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continually,
this
figure in
bus
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the bus
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was a gradual reduction. At the
beggining
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beginning
,
car
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the car
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had the highest number at about 5
million
passengers,
while
the
bus
and
train
was
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were
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little
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a little
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bit lower at approximately 4
million
and 2
million
respectively. In 2000, there was not much change in the position of 3 ways. The
car
leading the trend with 7
million
people
was used, after that, there was
small
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a small
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drop
by
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0.5
million
in the figure of railway
commuter
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commuters
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.
Lastly
, there was a slight growth to 3
million
in the
bus
through 30 years. By 2030, the number of
people
who commute by
car
is expected
reach
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the highest point at 9
million
.
Train
continute
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continue
with significant increase and pass over
bus
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the bus
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at 4.5
million
. In the future,
people
tend to use private transport more than public transport like
bus
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buses
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so it drop to 3
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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