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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, as technology grows intensively, numerous people pay attention to the internet especially from their mobile devices in order to get some information rather than using the old way either by reading physical newspapers or watching
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 programmes on the television.
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, in
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 essay, I will elaborate to find out whether
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 is a good improvement or not.
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 with, there are several benefits of obtaining
news
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 from the Internet.
Firstly
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, efficiency. Most individuals tend to have a lack of time, sometimes it is difficult to spare the time just to gain information by watching TV, especially buying physical newspapers with the condition
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which we have a mobile phone, with just one touch, we can access some trends in
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 world through Google.
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, cost-effectiveness.
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,
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, based on a survey conducted by Folkative, 85% of households decided to stop subscribing to the physical magazine because it was more expensive
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 looking at the
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 website, you can get free.
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 idea started to push society to realize that offline
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 through paper is not a friendly budget.
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, there is a major negative impact of
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 online
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 industry. People who
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 at bookstores, paper printing, and in the media industry started to lose their jobs, eventually, some of their salaries were cut because of the low profit, a result because most of the population was changing their
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 to digital.
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, Gramedia, which has been the most popular offline bookstore in Indonesia, reported in 2021 that they had to lay off some of their precious employees
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 a minus number in their financial reports 3 years back. In conclusion, the digital-savvy environment for looking at current issues through the internet is positive in some aspects,
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 as easier access and money-friendly.
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 it is beneficial, we have to think respectfully and find a solution for the people who are negatively affected by
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 situation.
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task response
To improve task response, make sure to address both the positive and negative aspects of obtaining news from the internet. Provide a clear stance on whether the development is positive or negative.
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