The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.

The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.
The diagrams show the average annual of schooling, scientists and technicians per thousand humans and
also
the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised
countries
between 1980 and 1990.
Overall
it is
undoubtfull
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doubtful
undoubtful
undoubtfully
that industrialised
countries
have huge numbers to
campare
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compare
with developing
countries
in all
activity
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activities
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and
year
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years
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. In 1980 very noticeable that
years
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the years
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of schooling in developing
countries
overwelmed
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were overwelmed
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by industrialised
countries
as well as
in 1990.
However
, scientists and technicians and spending on research and development in 1980
hasn't
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didn't
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such
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have such
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a huge gap. But it is undeniable that in 1990
industralised
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industrialised
countries
sharply increased, meanwhile developing
countries
have a minor increase or even decrease leads situation to
undesireable
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undesirable
way for developing
countries
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • average
  • schooling
  • scientists
  • technicians
  • participation
  • research and development
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • 1980
  • 1990
  • comparison
  • trends
  • differences
  • education
  • research levels
  • potential reasons
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