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The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.

The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.
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The diagrams show the average annual of schooling, scientists and technicians per thousand humans and
also
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 the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised
countries
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 between 1980 and 1990.
Overall
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 it is
undoubtfull
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doubtful
undoubtful
undoubtfully
 that industrialised
countries
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 have huge numbers to
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compare
 with developing
countries
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 in all
activity
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activities
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 and
year
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years
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. In 1980 very noticeable that
years
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the years
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 of schooling in developing
countries
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overwelmed
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were overwelmed
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 by industrialised
countries
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as well as
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 in 1990.
However
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, scientists and technicians and spending on research and development in 1980
hasn't
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such
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have such
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 a huge gap. But it is undeniable that in 1990
industralised
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industrialised
countries
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 sharply increased, meanwhile developing
countries
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 have a minor increase or even decrease leads situation to
undesireable
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undesirable
 way for developing
countries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • average
  • schooling
  • scientists
  • technicians
  • participation
  • research and development
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • 1980
  • 1990
  • comparison
  • trends
  • differences
  • education
  • research levels
  • potential reasons
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