The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

» You should write at least 150 words.
The chart below depicts the total
number
of visitors to the two new music websites during the period of 15 days. The unit is denoted by thousands.
Overall
, we can see that there was a variation in the
number
of people who clicked on both websites but Pop Parade shows
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
higher
number
of visitors than Music Choice in most of the days. In terms of Music Choice, it started from 40
thousand
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
the first
day
and ended with nearly 80
thousand
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
visitors
at the end
.
In addition
, the total
web-surfers
Correct your spelling
web surfers
show examples
fluctuated marginally from
day
four until
day
eleven before it reached its first peak at approximately 120
thousand
then
varied until
when
Rephrase
apply
show examples
it dropped sharply
at
Change preposition
on
show examples
day
fifteenth
Correct your spelling
15
.
On the other hand
, Pop Parade saw a higher
number
of people enjoying their website from beginning at almost 120
thousand
then
remained stable before it declined steeply to 60
thousand
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
day
fifth
Rephrase
apply
show examples
, followed by a fluctuation during 3 days period before it rose dramatically to just over 150
thousand
. Surprisingly it plummeted on the next
day
to 80
thousand
then
went up noticeably to its second highest point at more than 160
thousand
and kept going up afterwards.
Submitted by yennhicao24 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words number, thousand, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!