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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart below depicts the total
number
 of visitors to the two new music websites during the period of 15 days. The unit is denoted by thousands.
Overall
, we can see that there was a variation in the
number
 of people who clicked on both websites but Pop Parade shows
the
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 higher
number
 of visitors than Music Choice in most of the days. In terms of Music Choice, it started from 40
thousand
in
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 the first
day
 and ended with nearly 80
thousand
of
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visitors
at the end
.
In addition
, the total
web-surfers
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 fluctuated marginally from
day
 four until
day
 eleven before it reached its first peak at approximately 120
thousand
then
 varied until
when
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it dropped sharply
at
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day
fifteenth
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15
.
On the other hand
, Pop Parade saw a higher
number
 of people enjoying their website from beginning at almost 120
thousand
then
 remained stable before it declined steeply to 60
thousand
in
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day
fifth
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, followed by a fluctuation during 3 days period before it rose dramatically to just over 150
thousand
. Surprisingly it plummeted on the next
day
 to 80
thousand
then
 went up noticeably to its second highest point at more than 160
thousand
 and kept going up afterwards.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, thousand, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
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