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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables show information about
sales
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 of fairtrade labelled Coffee and Bananas in millions of euros in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. It is important to note that in 1999
Switzerland
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 had the highest
sales
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 of either coffee or bananas in comparison with others. In the coffee table,
Switzerland
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 had 3M
sales
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 which is half of its
sales
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 in 2004 but it was two times of
UK
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sales
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 in 1999.
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, the
UK
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 had 20M
sales
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 in 2004 which was the highest among them.
On the other hand
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, Sweden had the lowest amount in both years which were respectively 0.8 and 1. Denmark and
Belgium
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 were in third and fourth rank after the
UK
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 and
Switzerland
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 in both years. In the bananas table,
Switzerland
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 had the highest amount of
sales
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 in both years and more other countries as well which were 15M in 1999 and 47M in 2004.
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, the
UK
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 had 1M
sales
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 in 1999 which was less than Denmark which was double it but had more than
Belgium
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 which was 0.6M in the same year.
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, in 2004 the
UK
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 had 5.5M
sales
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 which was more than
Belgium
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, Sweden and Denmark and
Belgium
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 had more
sales
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 which was 4.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "hence".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, switzerland, m, uk, belgium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade labelled
  • significant increase/decrease
  • consumer awareness
  • sustainable growth
  • ethical consumerism
  • market trends
  • dominant market
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic impact
  • market penetration
  • exponential growth
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