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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates the different types of
transports
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transport
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 used to travel in a European City from 1960 to 2000. It is evident from the chart that, car transport was gradually increasing throughout the period,
while
the
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other
transports
 were declined.
To begin
, car
traveler
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traveller
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 stood at just 5 per cent in 1960, which was 5 times less than for the bike
traveler
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traveller
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, and
this
 was far less than on foot. Apart from a jump to approximately 35% of total
travelers
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travellers
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 in 2000. The next two
transports
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transports'
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 popularity
were
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was
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the
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a
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 similar trend, both were gradually decreasing over the time frame. In 1980, bike and foot
travelers
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travellers
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 were 20% and
at
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apply
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about 18% respectively.
At the end
 of the period, both
transports
 were
in
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between 5 to 8% in 2000. Bus popularity spiked to 25 per cent in 1980.
Then
 its popularity decreased the following year, and the
bus
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number of bus
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traveler
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traveller
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 was 15 per cent.
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