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The chart below shows number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
adults
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 (in thousands) taking part in major
sports
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 in a particular region in the years 1997 and 2017. In general, the total
number
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 of people engaging in
sports
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 was higher in 2017 than in 1997. Most
sports
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 categories saw an increase in adult participation from 1997 to 2017. More specifically, the most popular activity by
adults
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 in both years was Gentle Walking. Least participation was seen in Basketball in 1997. Cricket was the least popular choice in 2017. The
number
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 of gym goers remained constant at about 35,000 in both years. For jogging, there was only a marginal increase from around 33,000
adults
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 in 1997 to around 34,000
adults
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 in 2017. Surprisingly, the highest jump in any sport category was in the case of Basketball closely followed by Hiking and Football. In the case of cricket, there is a significant drop from 26,000
adults
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 in 1997 to 5,000
adults
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 in 2017.
To sum up
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, there was an increase in the
number
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 of
adults
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 participating in these seven major
sports
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of
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in
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 a given area from 1997 to 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, adults, sports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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