Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree.

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Hi Lalitha, I hope

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you in good health and in high spirits ! My sister's wedding is going to be held on December 23rd 2023 and I would request you to take up

this

wonderful opportunity to perform on her special day.

Firstly

, you are a very established singer and have sung many

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songs for the Bollywood Industry.

Additionally

, My sister is a huge fan of your music and she would be very pleased if you could perform some of your hit romantic songs. As for the compensation , I will discuss that with your personal manager and make the necessary payment in advance.

Furthermore

, I will book the flight and hotel for you and your entire crew. It will be my pleasure to host your entire team on

this

ecstatic day. I am eagerly looking forward to your response. Your Faithfully, Shreyashi

Submitted by shreyagr1209 on Sat Nov 04 2023

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coherence cohesion

Use appropriate transition words and phrases to improve the cohesiveness of the letter.

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary by using more varied and sophisticated words and phrases.

grammatical range

Pay attention to sentence structures to ensure accuracy and clarity.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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7 paragraphs

147 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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