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Write about the following topic: Some people say that the amount of noise that people make should be strictly controlled. Others say that people should be free to make as much noise as they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

#topic #people #amount #noise #minutes
Some would argue that the
noise
level
of
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people
 make during
a
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 day should be under
the
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control and checked frequently. Others would argue that men and women ought to be free to make limitless
noise
as
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at
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 their
wished
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 levels.
While
,
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 no limitations on the
noise
level
provides
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provide
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 a great opportunity to produce
music
 or do
parties
 whenever they want, I believe,
this
 could lead to
noise
pollution
 in many residential
areas
. On the one hand,
people
 should play or listen
music
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to music
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in
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at
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 a high volume in their houses
any
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at any
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 time without hesitation. Since they are doing these activities
in
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 their own properties, they have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to play their favourite instruments or
listen
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listen to
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music
.
In addition
 to
this
,
people
 might want to
make
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have
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 home
parties
 in their
residents
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residences
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 without
concerning
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being concerned
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 about the legal arrangements
on
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for
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noise
pollution
. During their events, they could use
a
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high volume amplifiers to improve their sound
quality
 of
music
.
For example
, in the US a lot of undergraduates
make
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hold
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parties
 throughout their educations and their
parties
 are significantly loud which
continue
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continues
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 until
the
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3 to 4 A.M. Despite
this
 freedom, I believe there should be regulations to restrict the
level
 of
noise
 and no
music
 hours after
the
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midnight.
On the other hand
, without any legitimate arrangements,
people
 can abuse
this
 freedom, specifically in residential
areas
. They should be controlled after certain hours because they will be able to
listen
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listen to
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loudy
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loudly
loud
music
in
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at
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the
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midnight.
This
noise
pollution
 generated by
neigbourhoods
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neighbourhoods
 could lead to
hear
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hearing
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 problems and a decrease
of
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 sleep
quality
 during the night.
In addition
, these conditions directly affect individuals' moods and mental
healths
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health
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. To illustrate
this
, in Turkey,
people
 cannot listen
or
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to or
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 play
music
 after 1 A.M. By
this
 arrangement, lots of residential
areas
strictly
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are strictly
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 controlled,and many
people
 reported their appreciation to the government.
Therefore
, they explained that their life
quality
 increased noticeably. Personally, I support these legal actions on
noise
pollution
 in housing
areas
. In conclusion,
although
people
 should
listen
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listen to
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music
 or
make
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have
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parties
 in their properties freely, there should be some controls for the
level
 of their
noise
level
, especially after
the
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midnight to maintain
quality
 lives.
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