The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
The presented maps depict the
functuations
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functions
happened
in a Correct pronoun usage
that happened
town
called Willington from 1780 to 2000.
Overall
, there can be seen
some transportation changes in the 60 years from 1780 to 1860, Wrong verb form
were
whereas
other functions of the city were not altered so much. Moreover
, the town
got
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the
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changes
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changed
of
some functions for civilians to live in the Change preposition
apply
town
such
as the number of residences or schools.
In 1860, people built a bridge over the river and a road going to the river newly
, so that it seemed they attained the ways to transport Rephrase
apply
though
the Correct your spelling
through
villlage
easily. The first stage for the Correct your spelling
village
town
to be civilized was the change of the
transportation.
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apply
Moreover
, as time passed by, the changes were shifted to buildings. For example
, the number of the
residences built in the village is 500 homes in 2000, which is 5 times Correct article usage
apply
of
the figure in 1780. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, they set a
few schools with sports grounds, which were, Change preposition
up a
not to mention
, along with
a street to get the schooling district from the home area. To sum up
, it can be said that the second step for the town
to be civilized was the change of the faclties
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facilities
faculties
such
as the homes and schools.Submitted by yuritnaka1217 on
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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