The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
The presented maps depict the
functuations
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functions
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in a
town
called Willington from 1780 to 2000. 
Overall
, there
can be seen
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some transportation changes in the 60 years from 1780 to 1860,
whereas
other functions of the city were not altered so much.
Moreover
, the
town
got
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the
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changes
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of
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some functions for civilians to live in the
town
such
as the number of residences or schools. In 1860, people built a bridge over the river and a road going to the river
newly
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, so that it seemed they attained the ways to transport
though
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through
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the
villlage
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village
easily. The first stage for the
town
to be civilized was the change of
the
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transportation. 
Moreover
, as time passed by, the changes were shifted to buildings.
For example
, the number of
the
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residences built in the village is 500 homes in 2000, which is 5 times
of
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the figure in 1780.
Furthermore
, they set
a
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few schools with sports grounds, which were,
not to mention
,
along with
a street to get the schooling district from the home area.
To sum up
, it can be said that the second step for the
town
to be civilized was the change of the
faclties
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facilities
faculties
such
as the homes and schools.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, such".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • changes
  • occurred
  • 1780
  • 1860
  • 2000
  • map
  • show
  • named
  • Willington
  • introduction
  • overview
  • comparison
  • conclusion
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