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Although there is a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

#translation #software #language
It is common to find translation software in
this
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 present day. But many still believe that picking up a new
language
 is still useful in life. For
this
 statement, I would like to completely agree that having a linguistic ability will be helpful because of these reasons.
Firstly
, it is quite easy for a person to learn a new
language
. In fact, a child who has linguistic skills from a young age can able to have better attention and task–switching capacities than children of the same age.
Secondly
, mastering a foreign
language
 is not as hard as people think. It is quite easy to pick up a new vocabulary, one of the simplest ways is observing how other people use it, it can be through family or friends both of whom can provide a good environment to learn a new
language
.
Last
 but not least, as it says there is a lot of translation software available, which is very helpful for people who don’t know a foreign
language
. But it isn’t helpful for us sometimes. In reality, we can easily find an app that can provide translation and how it works so smoothly.
However
, it is just an advertisement to attract users for app owners. If we want to acquire the uses that the program advertises, we have to pay a fee – a subscription to unlock it, which is quite inconvenient sometimes. In conclusion, having the ability to break linguistic barriers is quite handy in the 21st century.
However
, becoming bilingual is beneficial in
this
 current society.
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The essay lacks a proper introduction and conclusion, with the ideas presented in a somewhat abrupt manner. Ensure that your essay starts with a clear introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss and ends with a firm conclusion that summarizes your stance and the points made. Transition sentences between paragraphs would also help guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
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Although the essay reflects an attempt to respond to the task, it requires a more comprehensive and clear response to the question regarding the usefulness of learning a language despite translation software. There needs to be a clearer argument structure, with more focused main points and specific examples to support your claims. Consider expanding your ideas to fully address the prompt, illustrate your perspectives, and substantiate your viewpoint with relevant examples.

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