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The graph below shows how people buy music.

The graph below shows how people buy music.
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The line graph shows the percentage of the way
of
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apply
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people
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 buy
music
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 in the
year
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 between the
year
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 2011 to 2018.
The
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People
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people
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 have reduced buying
the
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apply
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music
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 through the
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year
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years
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, we would witness
CD's
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CD
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purchase
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purchases
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 have reduced
alot
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a lot
 by the
year
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 2018 . By
the
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this
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 time
people
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have
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started to purchase through
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the stream
a stream
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stream
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Stream
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.
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People's
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People
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have
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have to
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reduce
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reduced
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 the
purchace
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purchase
 of
CD'S
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CDs
 from 60% to 25% by
the
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apply
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2018. The download
music
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were
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was
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 more
between
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popular between
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 the
year
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 2014 to 2015 and it
also
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have
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apply
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decreased
nearly
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by nearly
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about
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apply
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15% by the
year
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 2018.
The
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People
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people
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 have started to
by
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buy
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music
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 by stream ,
it
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and it
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have
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has
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 increased
5
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by 5
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% to 40%
through
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apply
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these
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this year
these years
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year
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 .
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People's
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People
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 were buying
music
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 at the rate of 55%
have
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has
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 decreased to 40% of
maximum
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the maximum
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 of buying
the
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apply
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music
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 . In the
year
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2011
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2011,
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 there were only 5%
of
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off
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of
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apply
show examples
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people's
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people
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 were buying
the
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apply
show examples
music
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 , but in the
year
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 2018 40% of
people
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are
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were
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 buying
music
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 through
stream
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streaming
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 only .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, music, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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