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The graph below shows how people buy music.

The graph below shows how people buy music.
#people #music
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The line graph shows the percentage of the way
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
people
 buy
music
 in the
year
 between the
year
 2011 to 2018.
The
Correct article usage
People
show examples
people
 have reduced buying
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
music
 through the
year
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years
show examples
, we would witness
CD's
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CD
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purchase
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purchases
show examples
 have reduced
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
 by the
year
 2018 . By
the
Correct your spelling
this
show examples
 time
people
have
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apply
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started to purchase through
Add an article
the stream
a stream
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stream
Capitalize word
Stream
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.
People's
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People
show examples
have
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have to
show examples
reduce
Wrong verb form
reduced
show examples
 the
purchace
Correct your spelling
purchase
 of
CD'S
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CDs
 from 60% to 25% by
the
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apply
show examples
2018. The download
music
were
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was
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 more
between
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popular between
show examples
 the
year
 2014 to 2015 and it
also
have
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apply
show examples
decreased
nearly
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by nearly
show examples
about
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apply
show examples
15% by the
year
 2018.
The
Correct article usage
People
show examples
people
 have started to
by
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buy
show examples
music
 by stream ,
it
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and it
show examples
have
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has
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 increased
5
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by 5
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% to 40%
through
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apply
show examples
these
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this year
these years
show examples
year
 .
People's
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People
show examples
 were buying
music
 at the rate of 55%
have
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has
show examples
 decreased to 40% of
maximum
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the maximum
show examples
 of buying
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
music
 . In the
year
2011
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2011,
show examples
 there were only 5%
of
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off
show examples
of
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apply
show examples
people's
Change noun form
people
show examples
 were buying
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
music
 , but in the
year
 2018 40% of
people
are
Wrong verb form
were
show examples
 buying
music
 through
stream
Wrong verb form
streaming
show examples
 only .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, music, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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