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The table below gives information on visitor statistics for 1996, 1998 and 2000 for various World Heritage sites in Australia.

The table below gives information on visitor statistics for 1996, 1998 and 2000 for various World Heritage sites in Australia.
The table illustrates the statistical databases of
visitors
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 who came to World Heritage
sites
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 in Australia in 1996, 1998 and 2000.
Overall
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, half of the examined
sites
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 witnessed an increased trend
that
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which
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were
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was
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 Great Barrier Reef, Blue
mountains
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Mountains
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,
Tasmania
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and Tasmania
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 wilderness. What was striking was that the Great Barrier Reef always attracted the highest number of
visitors
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. The rest saw a decline in the end compared to the initial time. Great Barrier Reef consistently rose during the whole surveyed period which started with 1,670,000 in 1996 before increasing to almost 3 million in 1998 and
finally
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 was double fold in 2000.
Others
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Other
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sites
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 saw a minimal
upwards
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upward
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 trend especially its trend dwindled
in
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at
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 the end of
this
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 period. In 1996, Blue
mountains
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Mountains
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 welcomed 526
thousand
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visitors
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then
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 increased
39
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to 39
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thousand
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 in 1998 and received 581,000
visitors
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 in 2000. Blue
mountains
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Mountains
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also
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 experienced an upturn,
however
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, the growth figures were the lowest compared with
two
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the two
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sites
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 which were mentioned above. In 1996, Tasmania wilderness had 450
thousand
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visitors
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then
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 rising to 475
thousand
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 in 1998,
finally
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 increasing to 483,000 in 2000. Turning to the remaining
sites
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 which acquired
less
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fewer
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 customers, despite Shark Bay being an exception in 1998 soaring to 102
thousand
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visitors
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 with only 84, 000 at the beginning,
finally
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, it still went down significantly to 89
thousand
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 guests in 2000. Taking a look at Macquain
island
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Island
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 numbers, It witnessed a growth in 2000 of 330 customers compared to 310 in 1998,
however
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, there were still 20 people lower than its initial time. Leaving aside that Central Eastern Rainforest reserve was the second place where most
visitors
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 visited, it witnessed a decrease of 20
thousand
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 in each surveyed period, commencing with 810
thousand
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 and ending
by
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with
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 770,000 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, sites, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor
  • statistics
  • years
  • compare
  • contrast
  • increase
  • decrease
  • number
  • specific
  • reasons
  • factors
  • affect
  • location
  • accessibility
  • marketing
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • tourism
  • conservation
  • future
  • policies
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