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the table shows the proportions of pupil attending four secondary school types

the table shows the proportions of pupil attending four secondary school types
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The given table illustrates the data information of four different types of secondary
schools
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 which
students
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 attend in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportions of
a
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the
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 number of
students
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 in 2005 were the lowest among other years.
Additionally
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, the number of pupils who attend
specialist
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schools
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 accounted for the lowest percentages. In 2000, voluntary-controlled
schools
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 were the most popular among parents to take their children there with almost half of them about 52% followed by Grammar
schools
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 which were 24% and
Specialist
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 and community
schools
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 with the same percentage of 12% of all
students
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. Meanwhile, graders in 2009 tended to go to community
schools
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 more by 58% and at the same time less by 10% for
specialist
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schools
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.
By contrast
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, as is shown by the table, 2005 witnessed a lower trend compared to 2009 and 2000. the lowest number of
students
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 were willing to attend
specialist
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schools
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as well as
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 2000 and 2009 with a proportion of 11%
while
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, voluntary-controlled and community
schools
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 were the most popular ones with 38% and 32%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, students, specialist with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • secondary school
  • independent school
  • grammar school
  • specialist school
  • pupil enrollment
  • trend
  • regional variation
  • socio-economic status
  • educational outcomes
  • parental preference
  • academic achievement
  • government policy
  • funding
  • attendance rates
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