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Students can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
Globalization and the amazing invention of the
internet
 have had a significant impact on learning methods.
Although
 most students now use the
internet
 to study and obtain the
information
 they require,
libraries
 still hold significant value in offering resources. I partially agree with the statement above, and the reasons for my preference will be explained in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, it is true that the
internet
 is a treasure trove of
data
 and
information
 in various fields, and it has its own advantages.
Firstly
, any
data
 on any subject is available 24/7 in less than a
second,
while
libraries
 are only open for a few hours each day.
Secondly
, it provides mobility as the
data
 is updated every second. Updated records can
also
 be obtained quickly.
Finally
, they provide the convenience of obtaining
information
 without needing to visit a particular location, which is beneficial for busy individuals.
For example
, students can
also
 obtain detailed
information
 about ongoing research on specific topics.
On the other hand
,
libraries
also
 have their own importance. First of all, in terms of atmosphere.
In addition
, the library environment is quiet with few distractions, which helps you to concentrate on studying.
For example
, during exams, 30% of students prefer to study in the university or school library.
Additionally
, anyone can update a blog or
information
 online, so no awarded research paper can be used to find experimental records. But ultimately, the
Internet
 is a crucial source of
information
due to
 its accessibility and portability.
However
,
libraries
also
 possess benefits like ambience, a quiet environment, and verification of accurate
data
along with
 the author's name.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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