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The diagram below shows information about carbon dioxide emissions for popular private jets

The diagram below shows information about carbon dioxide emissions for popular private jets
#information #carbon #dioxide #emissions #jets
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The table depicts information about
fuel
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consumptions
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consumption
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,
carbon
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dioxide
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production
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, and
flight
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cost
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 per
hour
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 in nine different aircraft.
Overall
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,
consumption
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 of
fuel
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 has
positive
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 correlation with
the
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carbon
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dioxide
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production
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,
while
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 the
cost
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 of
flight
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 varies in
three
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 different categories.
To begin
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 with, Gulfstream III scores the highest
consumption
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 of
fuel
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 (488 gallons of
fuels
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fuel
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 per
hour
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) and most producing
carbon
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dioxide
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 (10,078 pounds per
hour
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).
In addition
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,
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fuel
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the fuel
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consumption
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 and
carbon
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dioxide
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production
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 of Gulfstream III
is
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are
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three
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 times higher than Cessna CJ II
as
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the lowest. Meanwhile, the
flight
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cost
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 is divided into
three
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 different categories.
First
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 category, Chesna CJ II, Beechjet 182, and Hawker 400XP
cost
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 $2750 for an
hour
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flight
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. Second category,
although
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 Hawker 800XP shares the same
consumption
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 of
fuel
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 and
carbon
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production
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, its
flight
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cost
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 is higher than Hawker 400XP at $4500 alongside Cessna Citation XLS and Learjet 60.
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 category, the
three
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 greatest
consumer
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consumers
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 of
fuel
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 and
producer
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producers
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 marks the highest flying
cost
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 at $6750.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, carbon, dioxide, production, flight, cost, hour, consumption, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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