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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries?

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries?
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The given table illustrates the information based on United Nations statistics about certain social and economic indicators in
Canada
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,
Japan
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,
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 in the year 1994.
Overall
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, the annual income per person has the highest effect on
Canada
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 and
Japan
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in contrast
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 to
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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. The life expectancy at birth has the lowest impact in all the countries.
Firstly
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, taking the daily calorie supply per person into consideration it has an average impact in four countries.
Secondly
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 talking about the adult literacy rate
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 account for 99% the highest compared to
Peru
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 which has 68% and the lowest is 34% in
Zaire
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. The annual earnings of people are $11100 in
Canada
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 and $15760 in
Japan
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,
whereas
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 people living in
Peru
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, and
Zaire
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 have around $160 and $130 comparatively low to the other 2 countries. Life expectancy at birth does not have much of an effect on any country as it is 76% in
Canada
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, 78% in
Japan
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, 51% in
Peru
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 and 46% in
Zaire
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, peru, zaire with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indicators
  • population
  • GDP per capita
  • life expectancy
  • literacy rate
  • infant mortality rate
  • prosperous
  • less developed
  • level of education
  • healthcare
  • improvements
  • services
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