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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The tables give information on the reasons why
people
 are willing to quit smoking
as well as
 when they are planning to do so.
Overall
, it is evident that the majority of
people
 intend to give up to have better health in general within
the
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half a
year
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 time.
Moreover
, the major part of quitters
smoke
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smokes
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 fewer than ten
cigarets
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cigarettes
 a
day
. Surprisingly, whilst having better health remains the top reason for wanting to give up smoking, present health problems remain
on
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 the bottom of the list with slightly over 10% of
people
.
Similarly
, fewer
people
 experience pressure from their families. When it comes to the amount of cigarettes smoked per
day
, the heaviest consumption of more than twenty units is seen among
people
 with the most popular reason to quit. Reasons
such
 as getting smoking-related illnesses
as well as
 financial issues are seen to be accurate for 25 to 30 per cent of individuals.
The
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71% of smokers
are intending
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 to give up,
majority
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the majority
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 of which is planning to do so within the next six months. Noticeably, the number of cigarettes smoked per
day
 in
the
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both were higher among
people
 smoking fewer than 10 pieces per
day
.
In contrast
, among those who are not planning on giving up, which takes up 29 per cent, 40% of them
smokes
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 more than 20 cigarettes. The least amount of
people
are intending
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 to quit within a month and approximately 20 per cent
plans
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plan
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 to do so within the next year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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