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The best way to learn a foreign language is self-study online. To what do you agree or disagree?

#language #self-study
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other
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individuals can study regardless of time and place.
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because they can obtain the studying materials easily by only searching the Internet. They can even
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 place on the bus, subway, etc.
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People
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Task Response
Make sure to clearly state your position on the given topic right from the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your ideas and arguments in a clear and logical manner. Use cohesive devices to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary. Use a variety of words and phrases to express your ideas in a more precise and nuanced way.
Grammatical Range
Pay attention to your sentence structure and grammar. Make sure to use correct verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and avoid common grammatical errors.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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