The Graph Below Shows the Number of Shops that Closed and The Number of New Shops that Opened in One Country Between 2011 and 2018

The Graph Below Shows the Number of Shops that Closed and The Number of New Shops that Opened in One Country Between 2011 and 2018
A glance at the line chart reveals how many
shops
were set up and turned down in one country during the period from 2011 to 2018.  
Overall
, both the
amount
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number
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of shop openings and closures indicated a downward trend from 2011 to 2018, with considerable fluctuations in the middle of the time. The
number
of shop openings was larger than the
number
of shop closures at the beginning;
an
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the
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opposite
number
was seen
at the end
.   First of all, there were 8500
shops
opened in 2011 and a rapid dip
into
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only 4000 in 2012, and
then
the quantity of
shops
went up to slightly higher than 6000. After an approximated 2000
shops
declined in 2015 and had similar numbers until 2017, it
finally
decreased to 4000
shops
.   In terms of the
number
of closures, there were just above 6,000 in 2011 and
then
remained at a similar level in 2014, with a small increment up to a little bit higher than 7,000
shops
. After that, a sudden fall in the
number
of
shops
was observed, down to around 500. At
last
, the
number
of
shops
surged back to 5000 in 2014 and remained constant till 2018.
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  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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