Some people believe that a great difference in age between people and children is more beneficial. Do you think the advantages of a greater difference in age between them outweigh the disadvantages?

In some parts of the world, People are categorized
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Grown-ups starting from 18 years
,
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thus
can get on four wheels, fulfill civil rights and even find a soulmate
while
some dissatisfied with
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.
This
essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
To begin
with,
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the Reality
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of survival as
human
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should begin as soon as the
child
is ready. As we know
Adulthood
is a prime age and it's really important that
child
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a child
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begins to manifest
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adultism at a very early age
therefore
some
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of the earth regard starting as early as 15 and some bring it to the late year 18.
While
it has
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the advantage
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to stay
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until almost twenty, to
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enough time to prepare towards
Adulthood
this
also
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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as the
child
will have the experience of
Adulthood
too
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and may take a
while
before he or she understands the assignment.
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The same
goes
to been
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early to
Adulthood
the
advantage
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advantages
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can be numerous but the Disadvantage is having less healthy and mental capacity to cope with the situations in
real
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world. Meanwhile ,
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regarded as
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a
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Grown-ups
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is saddled with responsibility . Early training for children is important.
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having a skill which is necessary to generate income for the individual. Nowadays once you are 18 it is believed that you should
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having required skills which is necessary for
a
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survival.
This
is the key to
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regarded as
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a grown
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grown up
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man or woman . In my opinion,
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agree that
the
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children at the almost twentieth year should be regarded as a
fully fledged
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man
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men
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or
woman
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women
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but it's better to gradually introduce
Adulthood
at
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early age by saddling the children with some simple
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.
While
the
the
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child
is preparing towards
Adulthood
it will be worth a
while
to notice that the
child
is ready to take the challenge of moving towards the new stage of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting
  • financial security
  • emotional maturity
  • life experience
  • extracurricular opportunities
  • career establishment
  • flexibility
  • generation gap
  • energy levels
  • health complications
  • optimal
  • stable environment
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