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the diagram below shows information aboaut carbon dioxide emission for popular private jets. ummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comaparisons where relevant

the diagram below shows information aboaut carbon dioxide emission for popular private jets. ummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comaparisons where relevant
The table given illustrates the carbon dioxide emission of nine different private aircraft reported with the
fuel
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 and flight
cost
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 used per hour.
Overall
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, Gulfstream III which needs a lot of
fuel
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 is the most polluting private aircraft with the most expensive expenditure.
On the other hand
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, the Cessna CJ II produce the least carbon dioxide in the air with the cheapest flight
cost
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.
To begin
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 with, the air is most polluted by 10,0780 (
lbs
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 CO2/
hr
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) produced by
Gulfestream
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Gulfstream
 III which needs 488
gallons
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 of
fuel
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 with a total
costof
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cost of
 $6,750 per hour, a similar
cost
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that is
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 needed by Gulfstream 550 and Challenger 605. Gulfstream 550 produces 8,342 (
lbs
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 CO2/
hr
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) needs 378
gallons
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 of
fuel
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while
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 Challenger 605 produce 6,180 (
lbs
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 CO2/
hr
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) need 280
gallons
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 of
fuel
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.
Next,
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Cessna Citation XLS as the cheapest private jet
witha
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with a
 $2,700 flight
cost
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/hour and 136
gallons
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fuel
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/
hr
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 usage, produced 3,002 (
lbs
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 CO2/
hr
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). With a similar
cost
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, Beechjet 400 and Hawker 400XP produced 4,017 and 4,149 (
lbs
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 CO2/
hr
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) respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, cost, lbs, co, hr, gallons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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