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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The four pie charts compare the
population
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 structure in terms of ages in
Yemen
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 and Italy through a 50-year period from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 aged from 15-59 at any time between 2000 and 2050
are
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is
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 significantly higher than the
overall
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populations
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population
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.
Also
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, the number of those who are below 14
years
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 old and those
belong
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who belong
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 to the 60+ age group witness different changes. In 2000, close to 50% and nearly 14% of citizens under 14 in
Yemen
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 and Italy respectively.
People
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 between 15 and 59
years
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 old contributed to 46% of the
population
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 in
Yemen
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, which was less than 20% that of Italians.
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,
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Yemen
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Yemen's
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 elderly
people
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 made up roughly 4% of the
population
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while
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 it was over 24% of
those
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apply
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for
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apply
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the elderly in Italy. In 2050, it is predicted that
a
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apply
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half of the
populations
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population
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 belonging to the 0-14
years
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 group will decrease by 13% in
Yemen
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. Simultaneously, approximately 57% of
people
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 range from 15-59
years
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 old and 5.7% of those who are over 60. In Italy, the proportion of
people
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 below 14
years
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 old will slightly shrink to 11.5%.It is forecasted to be close to 46.2% of
people
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 over 15 and 42.3% of the
population
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 are 60+.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, yemen, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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