The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The four pie charts compare the
population
structure in terms of ages in
Yemen
and Italy through a 50-year period from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
, the number of
people
aged from 15-59 at any time between 2000 and 2050
are
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significantly higher than the
overall
populations
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.
Also
, the number of those who are below 14
years
old and those
belong
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to the 60+ age group witness different changes. In 2000, close to 50% and nearly 14% of citizens under 14 in
Yemen
and Italy respectively.
People
between 15 and 59
years
old contributed to 46% of the
population
in
Yemen
, which was less than 20% that of Italians.
Moreover
,
Yemen
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elderly
people
made up roughly 4% of the
population
while
it was over 24% of
those
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for
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the elderly in Italy. In 2050, it is predicted that
a
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half of the
populations
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belonging to the 0-14
years
group will decrease by 13% in
Yemen
. Simultaneously, approximately 57% of
people
range from 15-59
years
old and 5.7% of those who are over 60. In Italy, the proportion of
people
below 14
years
old will slightly shrink to 11.5%.It is forecasted to be close to 46.2% of
people
over 15 and 42.3% of the
population
are 60+.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, yemen, people, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
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