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The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
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The line graph depicts the dash of
waste
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 manufactured by 3 companies from 2000 to 2015.
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, it is noticeable that
company
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 A was the most popular fabric before 2012 when
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 C replaced it and obtained the highest amount of
waste
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,
whereas
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company
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 B lowest.
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,
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company
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companies
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 A and B showed downward trends,
while
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company
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 C upward trends.
To begin
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 with
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company
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Company
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 A, it was
on
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at
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peak
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 which accounted for 12 in 2000 .
Therefore
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, it decreased gradually to 8 in the final years. In terms of
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B
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it increased to approximately 10 in 2005 before falling
up
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to 3 in the next 10 years and was the
company
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 which had the smallest amount of
waste
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 throughout the period. With regards to
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 C, it accounted for under 3 which rose marginally to 6 in 2005. Ultimately, it increased progressively to 11 roughly in the final years and was the fabric which obtained the biggest amount of
waste
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 over the period in question.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste production
  • company
  • trends
  • significant
  • fluctuations
  • surges
  • reductions
  • correlations
  • environmental policies
  • technological advancements
  • units of measurement
  • time period
  • stability
  • milestones
  • graph analysis
  • pattern recognition
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