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The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040

The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040
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The line graph provides information about the proportion of three different age groups in Japan over the eighty-year
period
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 (between 1960 and 2040).
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the number of children and middle-aged decreased
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 the figure for senior citizens increased during a
period
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 of 80 years.
This
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 trend will be projected until 2040. Looking into details, it is evident that the range of people aged 0 to 14 experienced a downward trend between 1960 and 1990, which were 30%, 35%, below 30% and 30 % respectively.
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, the
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 of children dropped from 1990 to 2040 (30% to 10 %).
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, the middle-age rate experienced a downward trend as same as those children in the early 30 years (1960 to 1990), which were 65%, 70 %, almost 70 %, and 70 % respectively.
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, it has been decreasing over the forty-year
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 (between 1990 and 2030) which were 70 %, 69 %, 65 %, 60 % and 55 % respectively.
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, in 2080, the middle-age
percentage
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 will be levelled off at 68 %.
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, in the early 10 years of the
period
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 (1960 to 1970), the number of senior citizens remained stable, which was 5 %.
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, the senior citizen's
percentage
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 was a gradual increase from 1970 to 2000, which were 10 %, 11 %, and 15 % respectively. In the next 20-year
period
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 (between 2000 and 2020) there was a significant increase in the figure of senior inhabitants. Meanwhile, from 2020 to 2030, the range of people aged 65+ has stayed constant (30 %).
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, the
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 of senior citizens will increase in 2040 which was 35 %.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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