our friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:

Dear Manthan, I am writing

this

letter to let you know about the changes that have been made to our movie plan. I got an email from my manager. He informed me I must meet the stakeholders

this

Monday at the Winnipeg office.

Due to

this

, I have to reach there tomorrow. I feel sad for not executing our movie plan but I have figured out your company. I had a word with Faruq my

cousin

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cousin's

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brother. You met him at my birthday party. Yesterday he came to my place to spend his school vacation. I suggest you take him with you and watch the movie. He is

also

very fond of theatre and will not let you feel bored. I assure you you will love his company.

Moreover

, he has a brand new Crola car, he will take you from your home and

then

you guys can easily commute to the cinema hall. Best Regards Navdeep Kaur

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task response

Ensure that the letter addresses all the points mentioned in the prompt. In this case, the letter should clearly communicate the change in plans and the suggestion of having the friend's cousin go to the movie instead.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure of the letter is somewhat clear, but it could benefit from more cohesive markers to connect the ideas more explicitly.

lexical resource

The letter demonstrates a fairly good range of vocabulary, but there is room to incorporate more varied and nuanced expressions.

grammatical range

The letter showcases a reasonable level of grammatical accuracy, but some sentence structures and tenses could be refined for greater precision and fluency.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

158 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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our friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:

Some students choose to take a gap year after graduating high school to work and/or travel. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, it is easier than ever for people to travel to different places. As a result, many locations that used to be free of tourists have now become popular tourist destinations.

Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flight, transport and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today`s tourism industry.

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?