You have heard about plans to build new apartments in a public park near your home You want to give your opinion about this Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper In your letter Explain how you learnt about these plans Say what you think of the park, give your opinions on the plans

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing you

this

letter regarding the new apartments that will be built at

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Central Park, and I imagine that would be a good story for your journal. A very close friend, who is one of the engineers of the construction, presented to me the initial blueprint of the project, and I could not believe it. Unfortunately, the entire space will

be vanished

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, and

the

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new building will

take

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place. In my point of view,

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Central Park is the most beautiful green area in our city. It is not only a place for family meetings, or to practice sports, but

also

a home of numerous animals, and everything will be gone until the end of March/23. I believe that

this

construction is going to be a huge mistake, and the people of our city will be in pain

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the end of

this

amazing place.

Furthermore

, there are a series of options where

this

apartment could be constructed. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Lucas Campos

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greeting and closing

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logical structure

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task response

The response does not fully address all aspects of the task. It should offer more detailed opinions about the plans for the new apartments and provide reasons for these opinions.

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grammatical range

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

177 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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