You have just moved to a new place. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter. -tell him/her you moved and why you moved -describe the new place -invite your friend to visit and suggest what to do.

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Dear Lingli, Hope you are doing well. I am writing

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email to notify you that I moved into my new apartment yesterday. As you know Xiaoxie and I planned to buy a new apartment since our previous flat is too small for four people to live in. My new place is still in the same district as my former one, but it is closer to Xinghai Square. There are 3 bedrooms with big windows, and we can enjoy a beautiful hill view from the window in the living room. I would like to invite you to visit my new home when you have time during the weekend. Now we have a big kitchen at home,

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, we can cook together and enjoy a chit-chat bestie meal. I am looking forward to your response. I can’t wait for your visit to my new home. Yours sincerely. SJ

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task response

Ensure to provide detailed reasons for the move and the description of the new place. Perhaps, include more specific details about the new apartment and the reasons behind the move.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure is mostly sound but there is room for improvement in maintaining a single idea per paragraph. Consider separating the descriptions into distinct paragraphs to enhance clarity.

lexical resource

The letter demonstrates a good range of vocabulary but could benefit from adding more descriptive and expressive language to vividly depict the new place and the invitation.

grammatical range

The letter exhibits a strong command of grammatical structures, but there are a few instances where sentence structures could be varied to add more variety and sophistication to the language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

147 words

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