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Some people think that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writings can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play important roles. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The advent of the computer has made it possible for people to store writings electronically. Some claim that traditional printed books are no longer necessary,
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 others argue that they are still irreplaceable. Personally, I agree with the latter view. On the one hand, digital writings have obvious advantages over paper books.
First,
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digital writings are easier to store than printed publications which are made of paper and normally occupy a large space.
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, libraries have to prepare many shelves to display them in each room.
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, e-books can readily be stored in small-sized electronic terminals
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 as cellphones and tablets.
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electronic literature is more environmentally friendly, as opposed to physical texts whose production might cause deforestation.
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, traditional texts cannot be replaced by e-books because they are more protective of the reader’s eyesight. To be precise, the light reflected by papers is generally much softer than the light radiated from the screen of electronic devices. If one stares at the screen of a cell phone to read online novels for more than two hours, he or she will experience eye fatigue.
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 is why virtual publication readers are prone to near-sightedness. Meanwhile, in my opinion, physical publications can better protect an author’s copyright than electronic literature.
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 is because e-texts can be easily accessed for free from websites, which severely violates the copyright of writers.
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, on some forum websites, a registered user can download the free digital copy of Harry Potter shared by other users without official authorization.
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, in comparison with digital publications, printed books can better protect the legitimate rights and interests of the author. In conclusion, in spite of some shortcomings, paper literature is still important in our lives.
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Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance coherence, make sure each paragraph consistently supports either the argument for or against printed books before presenting your own viewpoint.
Task Achievement
Ensure the essay addresses both views equally, as this will provide a more balanced approach and further strengthen your argument.
Task Achievement
Try to include more examples or delve deeper into existing ones to make your points even more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical structure in analyzing both perspectives is well-managed, showing a clear progression of ideas.
Task Achievement
The essay uses relevant examples, such as the environmental impact and copyright issues, to explain points effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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