Sketching A Dream: How Japan Inspires My Artistic Journey

Artists aren’t extraordinary at all; they’re all just stubborn kids who refused to put down their crayons as a child.”

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quote deeply resonates with my soul. I was exposed to the world of

art

when my uncle showed me anime at the age of seven. I vividly remember the very first time I watched anime, it was “Hunter X Hunter”. When I saw it, it felt as if my little brain just had an epiphany; the mesmerizing

art

, compelling storyline, and fluidity of animation genuinely left me star-struck. From that moment on,

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overly determined kid’s awkward, stiff fingers got to work. Drawing on every surface she could find, seeking tutorials—even using a language she couldn’t understand. Soon after, she discovered how to draw in an anime

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style from Japanese artists,

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day and night. Soon, her hands got used to the motion and realized that drawing had become second nature to her. That overly determined kid was me. In the back of my mind, I’ve always wanted to go to Japan to pay tribute to the country that had inspired me. I had fallen in love with their

art

and their culture. I know that I can see and feel

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in every corner of Japan—from their streets,

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, to their people.

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in Japan, I plan to immerse myself in their beauty, create unique

art

, and share it with the world, hoping to inspire other artists along the way. With SFL’s program,

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dream of mine is in front of my eyes; it feels so surreal. I’m deeply grateful to SFL for the opportunity that they have given me. Regardless of the outcome, I will never cease to continue making

art

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To enhance your essay further, consider providing more concrete examples or detailed scenarios about how you plan to immerse yourself in Japanese culture and art. This will add more depth to your task response.

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Enhance transitions between paragraphs by using linking words or phrases to make the flow of ideas even smoother.

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Your essay contains a well-articulated introduction and conclusion, framing your artistic journey and future aspirations nicely.

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The logical structure of your essay is clear, making it easy to follow your journey and understand your passion for Japanese art.

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You've provided relevant specific examples, such as the anime 'Hunter X Hunter' and your determination to draw, which effectively illustrate your points.

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Your ideas are clear and comprehensive, showcasing your enthusiasm and gratitude towards art and the opportunity from SFL.

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Sketching A Dream: How Japan Inspires My Artistic Journey

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