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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
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line chart below illustrates data on sold
wheat
 in three different countries between 1985 and 1990. Numbers here given are displayed in
millions
 of
tonnes
.
Overall
,Canada exported
wheat
 the most
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 with
Australia
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Australian
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 and European communities. As can be clearly seen from the graph, in 1985,
wheat
 exports accounted for between 15 and 20
millions
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million
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 in three areas. In
this
tear
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year
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,Australia sold only 15
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 to other nations, and the following year, it saw a moderate growth (almost
16million
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16 million
of
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tonnes
). Till the end of
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time
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 the number of export decreased gradually.
Following
this
,
in1985
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in 1985
, Canada exported 20
millions
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million
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 of
tonnes
wheat
 abroad which was the highest number in that year. The number of sold
wheat
 rocketed to 25
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 in 1988, before falling sharply in next year (just under 15
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
).
Wheat
 export saw a significant increase in 1990 by almost 20
millons
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millions
million
 of
tonnes
. Regarding
this
,
European
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the European
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 community witnessed fluctuation in
wheat
 sales from 1985 to 1990. In 1985,
wheat
 sales stood at 17
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
, but in 1986
it
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 went down by 3
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
. In
following
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the following
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 years , there was a slight increase which in 1990 it already was 21
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 of export.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, millions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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