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Today, many people do not know about their neighboars in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this

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In modern cities nowadays, the neighbourhood of
people
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 is
decreasingly
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 very much. I think because humans in modern life
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 swamped
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they do not have enough
time
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 to communicate with their
neighbours
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 and it
made
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 a gap between
people
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 and
people
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. First of all, most
people
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 lead busy lifestyles, spending most of their
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 working and studying, meaning they can not talk to their next-door
neighbours
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 or even with their friends. Even
they
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 find some free
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, they make the most of it by spending
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 with family or focusing on their personal and professional lives. All of these factors contribute to
people
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 no longer wanting or having
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 to communicate with their next-door
neighbours
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.
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, poor community design can be a problem, making communication between
people
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 who live next to them more arduous. To be precise, there is a lack of amenities
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 as playgrounds and gardens, which limits the opportunity to get to know each other in some neighbourhoods.
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, there are reasonable measures to solve the problem.
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social events should be held in nearby areas. By placing more importance on organizing social events,
people
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 can begin to interact with each other
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 form strong bonds between
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. My area can be an example,
people
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 in most neighbourhoods celebrate the traditional holiday by cooking a national dish (Banh Chung, Banh Tet),
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 they deliver that dish to all of
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 in my area, which in turn can be a way to promote solidarity in neighbourhood relationships. Another solution is to take a radical approach to urban design reform in certain areas of cities.
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, creating more shared spots,
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 as gardens or playgrounds, can improve the likelihood of
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 seeing each other regularly. In conclusion, the government should encourage
people
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 in all cities and provinces in the country to celebrate more social events so it will have a chance for
people
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 to talk to each other and they can help others with problems in their areas.
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