In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and theri levels of health and fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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nations
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state for situation increment of average weight and decrement of health
also
fitness of citizen.
This
essay aims to discuss those problems, factors and practical solutions. On the one hand, today individuals prefer to do their duties in easier ways in order to waste less energy. They believe that working for a long time in their job places takes lots of energy from them so it is not necessary to be active after work.
For instance
, people do not go to the gym, walk on the street or jog in order to do exercise because they believe they have overdrive which is enough for their body and health.
Also
, with improving industry agriculture and the production of a number of ingredients by technology, humans use fewer rural products than civil goods.
For example
, they prefer to use fast-ready
food
such
as fast
food
that causes increasing weight.
Further
, expanding non-organic
food
all over the world creates extra fat in the human body's human.
On the other hand
, there are some ways to tackle it.
First,
people should set a regular schedule in their daily routines.
For example
, every morning, before starting the day, they work out in order to be fresh and increase blood flow in their body. Second. Use organic ingredients and natural products,
such
as vegetables, fruits, dairy etc.
Whereas
, avoid eating junk
food
such
as soda, chips or fast
food
that has harmful oil which causes an increase in weight. In conclusion,
although
there are some reasons to have worse health with obesity, by following some rules people can tackle it.
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  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • calorie-dense
  • processed food
  • junk food
  • unhealthy eating habits
  • physical inactivity
  • lack of exercise
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • unhealthy lifestyle
  • fast food consumption
  • advertising
  • stress
  • busy lifestyle
  • nutrition education
  • access to exercise facilities
  • cultural factors
  • government intervention
  • healthy lifestyle promotion
  • education on healthy eating
  • exercise facilities
  • taxes on unhealthy food
  • public exercise facilities
  • regulating advertising
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