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Problem solution essays Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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The
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excessive
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immediate attention. Among
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 one of the most serious troubles is the strain
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 resources and infrastructure.
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 must be solved at the governmental and individual levels. One of the biggest consequences of overpopulation is
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 and pollution of natural resources. People neglect
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 values of nature and often use them more than necessary.
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, they do not recycle waste,
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 polluting air, soil and water. Many toxic gases,
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 methane, CO2 and other harmful substances enter the environment and damage all life on the planet.
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 cities like Mumbai, with
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 12 million people often suffer from
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 of clean water, which can cause serious illnesses.
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 and individuals must work together and diligently to resolve these accumulated issues. At the government level, the situation can be improved by investing in sustainable infrastructure promoting public transportation and environmental improvement.
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,
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individuals
 have the option to make a positive impact through their choices,
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, using public transportation, carpooling, and choosing to live in more environmentally friendly housing. Minimizing individual carbon footprints plays a vital role in the solution.
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, addressing the issue of urban overpopulation necessitates a collective approach. Governments should place urban planning and sustainable development at the forefront,
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 individuals can contribute by adopting environmentally responsible
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 and endorsing policies that tackle the complexities associated with overpopulation. Collaboratively, we can establish urban environments that are both habitable and sustainable for present and future generations.

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