The below maps show the development of a city between 1936 and 2007.

The below maps show the development of a city between 1936 and 2007.
The maps illustrate the huge changes in the
city
from 1936 to 2007.
Overall
, in 1936, the
city
was much greener with wider free space area,
while
the
city
was more modern with many buildings in 2007. Looking into details, on the northeast, the long river in 1936 was transformed into a residential area in 2007.
Similarly
, the government
office
located in the south and next to
farmland
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was demolished and removed by the museum, followed by the farmland transformation into a golf course. In the southwest, the cycle path was removed and changed by a road,
while
some trees in the northwest still remained, with a few trees.
Furthermore
, there were changes to some buildings located in the centre of the
city
.
Firstly
, the shopping centre located in the middle was destroyed and left as a free space. Another change was that both the sweet shops and butter beside the post
office
were ruined and
built
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a big supermarket.
Additionally
, a travel agent was built to remove the flower shop opposite the post
office
.
However
, the bank and the library next to the flower shop still existed without changes
as well as
the post
office
.
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