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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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The two maps below display the developments of the Westley, which have been done over two centuries.
Overall
, in those years, the town has turned into an urban area with a sound transportation system from a rural one with agricultural and forest areas.
Firstly
, both maps clearly show that a railway station and a cinema hall have been built on the lower left side of the map after removing the fields.
Also
, the Twine Toll Bridge, with its connected road, has been demolished to make way for a new railroad connecting that station.
In addition
, the road has been extended towards the lower portion of the map, and the Linton woods, previously located in the centre of the town, have been chopped down and replaced by a new housing estate. At the same time, Lord Westley's House has been converted into a commercial-residential place.
Furthermore
, the authority has built a sports centre with a museum and a shopping centre in the place of the Coach Inn and the Church, respectively. Other mentionable developments were the extension of the residential facilities by developing a new business area
along with
 it and the building of a new commercial zone on the bottom side of the map.
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task response
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed analysis of the maps, covering key developments and changes. A more direct response to the prompt by balancing the viewpoints of technology bringing people together and driving them apart could improve task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a logical structure and good use of linking words to connect ideas. However, the introduction and conclusion could be more prominent and the progression of ideas could be more effectively guided.
lexical resource
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary relevant to the task. However, there are instances where more precise and varied vocabulary could be utilized to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
There is a good range of complex structures and sentence variety. Some errors in sentence structure and word choice could be addressed to enhance grammatical range.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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