It is generally believed that some people are born with talents, for instance sport or music, and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person. discuss both views and give your opinion
Mostly
ever
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every
person
has meet
a Change the verb form
met
person
in there
life, who was naturally good at a specific Correct your spelling
their
hobbie
, without even trying. Correct your spelling
hobby
hobbies
This
makes people
question, if children who are not gifted with a specific talent are still able to achieve the same level
, as a gifted child. I believe that everyone can achieve the same level
in a certain hobby, which I will explain. Furthermore
, I will be looking at both sides of this
argument in the following essay.
On one hand, when a person
is gifted in something, when the person
starts dedicating more time
to that activity, they will improve in a faster time
then
someone who is not gifted. Replace the word
than
For instance
, my childhood friend Noah, already in kindergarten used to be the fastest person
in the one hundred meter race. Without triyng
he would win against everyone, by a big difference. Correct your spelling
trying
Then
when he got older he took runnning
lessons and Correct your spelling
running
mad
massive improvements in his running Correct your spelling
made
time
, in a shourt
amount of Correct your spelling
short
time
. For a non gifted
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non-gifted
person
, being able to achieve his running time
, with such
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a shourt
shourt
amount of training would be nearly Correct your spelling
short
impossibly
. Change the word
impossible
Additionally
, when a person
has natural talents, the results will motivate the person
, causing the person
to work
even harder. A person
who starts at zero,
will find it harder to get motivated because at the start the Remove the comma
apply
person
will not see results. Therefor
, it is harder for normal Correct your spelling
Therefore
people
to achieve the same level
as talented people
because talented people
achieve better reults
faster and will, Correct your spelling
results
also
be more motivated then
non Correct your spelling
than
talanted
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talented
people
.
On the other hand
, through hard work
and dedication ever
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every
person
can achieve there
goals Correct your spelling
their
evenetally
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eventually
For example
, when you are build
skinny and weak, building up strength will take a Change the verb form
are building
person
longer, then
someone who is naturally strong. But, through going to the gym Correct your spelling
than
regulier
the Correct your spelling
regularly
person
is still able to get strong, it will just take the individual a longer time
. Also
, nowadays through new machines and newly developed training methords
, Correct your spelling
methods
people
are able to train effectively and achieve goals in an
similar Change the article
a
time
then
naturally talanted
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talented
people
. Such
as,
new weight machines that support movements in a way that the Remove the comma
apply
trageted
muscles, get trained more intensely. Correct your spelling
targeted
Therefor
, through hard Correct your spelling
Therefore
work
, new exercising machines and training methords
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methods
people
who are not naturally amazing at a hobbie
can still achieve the same Correct your spelling
hobby
level
as a gifted person
.
In conclusion, it has been discussed if children how
are not Correct word choice
who
naturelly
gifted at a Correct your spelling
naturally
hobbie
are able to achieve the same Correct your spelling
hobby
level
as a child who is gifted at a talent. In my opinion
the strongest reason, supporting my view on the topic, is that through hard Add a comma
opinion,
work
and dedication everything is achievable, as I have experienced this
on my own.Submitted by z.pfister on
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