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the graph below show the population of turtles from 1980 to 2012.

the graph below show the population of turtles from 1980 to 2012.
The line graph given below represents the
population
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 of different types of
turtles
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 in India from 1980 to 2012. Starting from
Leatherback
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Turtles
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, the
population
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 of
leatherback
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turtles
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 decreased from 100 in the
year
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 1980 to just 60 in the
year
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 2012. Their
population
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 increased
initially
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 from the
year
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 1980 to 1987. In 1987, The
population
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 of
Leatherback
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turtles
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 was the highest with more than 110
turtles
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 in India. In 1987, the number of
leatherback
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turtles
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 was equal to the number of Olive Ridley
Turtles
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. The
population
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 of Olive
turtles
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 increased constantly from 100 in 1980 to nearly 140 in 1997. And after 1997 till 2012,
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population
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the population
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 of Olive was roughly
same
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the same
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 every
year
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. The
population
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 of Green
turtles
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 and All species was 100 in 1980, and All species saw an
overall
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 growth in
population
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 to 110 in 2012,
whereas
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 the
population
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 of Green
turtles
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 witnessed an
overall
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 decrease in the
population
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 to just 90
turtles
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 in 2012. In conclusion, the
Population
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 of Green
turtles
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 and
Leatherback
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turtles
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 decreased from 1980 to 2012,
while
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 the
population
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 of Olive Ridley
turtles
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 and all species
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turtles
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of turtles
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 increased from 1980 to 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, turtles, leatherback, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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