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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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Urbanization has led to numerous
problems
, like illegal encroachment on the natural environment ,
water
 scarcity, and improper
waste
 disposal. The illegal disposal of
waste
 has led to severe
problems
, like pollution. The solution for
this
 problem could be solved by proper solid and liquid
waste
 disposal
system
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systems
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 and
water
 scarcity could be sorted out by solutions like
rain
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rainwater
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water
 harvesting . The
problems
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problem
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due to
 rapid urbanisation is the encroachment of natural environments like paddy fields , forests, etc.
This
 could lead to
further
 depletion of biodiversity. The improper disposal of liquid and solid
waste
 could lead to pollution.
This
 could harm the other beings living in that particular area. The construction of high-rise
bulidings
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buildings
 has led to
shortage
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 of
water
 supply. The solution to the problem could be done through proper urban planning by the government. The building communities should promote a proper
waste
 disposal system. The people living in the particular area should plant more native or local plants and trees to stop the depletion of biodiversity. In summary, urbanization leads to a higher standard of living and provides good job opportunities for people in urban
centers
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.
Nevertheless
, if it is not done with a vision of proper planning it could create
heath
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health
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problems
 and it could
also
 damage the natural environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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