Recent advances in air travel have focused only on those sitting in Þrst class and have left other passengers with no beneÞts. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
last
enhancements in flights have touched on the
passengers
only from
first
class
when others have not been provided with any advantages. I totally agree that
airlines
have benefits only for
first
class
, which forms the smallest share of the total amount of
passengers
on board.
This
essay will describe the
privileges
of
first
class
with
further
description of possible and useful benefits for
passengers
from economy
class
. It is worth considering, that many
airlines
, especially transatlantic ones, offer
first
class
passengers
such
privileges
as private bedroom and shower,
moreover
, some of
airlines
offer SPA salon and massage rooms. All these
privileges
are unnecessary on board of aircraft. Needless to say, that main aim of airflight is transfer people to their final destination safely with normal comfort rather than offer incredible and luxury in-flight service.
Instead
of improving
privileges
for
first
class
, it’s better notice that economy
class
passengers
take up the most part of the aircraft cabin.
In other words
, economy
class
passengers
are the target audience of
airlines
and could have more benefits on board of aircrafts.
For example
, to have access to more space with comfortable chair and to have no surcharges for flight date changes.
Thus
, the
airlines
will show the respectful attitude to all its
passengers
. To summarise, after analysing the recent advances in air travel which are focused only on
first
class
passengers
, it is felt that
airlines
should improve the
privileges
system to all its
passengers
without exception and these changes will increase the amount of pleasant and loyal
passengers
all over the world.
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