Many people argue that in order to improve educational equality, high school students are encourage to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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around the world are mostly required to show some respect toward their teachers.

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some people

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some equality between that relationship but there are

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some people who reject that idea.

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opinions and I personally support that

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are encouraged to show their criticism and make comments. Encouraging

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to think critically will not only enhance their understanding better but

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can build up their

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to be brave in stating their

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in public. Even though it seems impossible for these educators and

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equal position in some cultures

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it can benefit the

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a lot.

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, it was found that rather than just

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the study material passively, high

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will learn better when they are actively learning by having some

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discussions

or even

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with their tutor regarding the subject.

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equal relationship will make the

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more courageous in stating their

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during the class as they

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their teachers as someone who can accept their opinions well.

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, changing the study method will create

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education

systems where the

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are active learners. High school

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majority

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are showing more reserved

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class and

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caused by the teaching that

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done by their culture.

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, mostly in Asian countries, class sessions are where teachers

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without being interrupted. They are expected to be quiet and showing a sign of criticism will mark them as

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sign towards the

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might cause the children to develop a

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personality where they are afraid to state their opinion. It is

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high schooler

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able to give their opinion freely but is still

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how to show some respect toward their tutors. in conclusion,

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high schoolers thinking critically can

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their ways of thinking and

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become

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still showing some respect towards their teacher.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that the introduction clearly states the topic and the writer's opinion. The conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the opinion.

task achievement

Provide relevant and specific examples to support the main points and opinions. Ensure that the response is complete and demonstrates clear and comprehensive ideas.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Many people argue that in order to improve educational equality, high school students are encourage to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

In some contries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this satetement?

SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT INDIVIDUALS TODAY ARE MORE DEPENDENT ON EACH OTHER. OTHERS BELIEVE PEOPLE HAVE BEOME MORE INDEPENDENT. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOURS OWN OPINION.

You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include ● Where you stayed ● What the problems were ● How they can fix your complaints

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.