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Answer an e-mail to a travel agency: as a tourist who has traveled to Australia with this company, give two pieces of information about the trip and make a suggestion;

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I hope you are doing well. I did my trip
last
 May with my family, it was an incredible experience, and I would like to share two highlights from my journey:
Firstly
, I had the pleasure of being accompanied by knowledgeable and enthusiastic tour guides. Their recommendations for local restaurants and activities were spot on, making my journey even more memorable.
Moreover
, the itinerary was well-structured and allowed for a perfect balance between sightseeing and leisure time.
This
 made the journey stress-free and allowed me to immerse myself fully in the Australian culture.
Additionally
, I'd like to suggest future
travelers
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. It would be beneficial to provide more detailed information about the local cuisine.
While
 I enjoyed exploring various culinary delights, having a bit more insight into the regional dishes and the best places to try them would have been a valuable addition to the trip. Once again, thank you for the wonderful experience in Australia. I look forward to planning more journeys with your agency in the future. Best regards,
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