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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers remain the main source of news for the majority of people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The popularity of accessing
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 from online
news
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 outlets is rising, but some groups still believe in printed
newspapers
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' supremacy as the sole source of
information
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 for most
people
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. I strongly disagree that the majority of the readers still buy physical
newspapers
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 to fulfil their
information
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 needs. From my viewpoint, most
people
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 prefer to read
news
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 on the
internet
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 over physical papers for efficiency and timing purposes.
First,
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consuming journalistic products from printed
newspapers
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 is less efficient than reading ones through the
Internet
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.
For instance
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,
people
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 with hard-copy
newspapers
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 have to read every
news
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, column, and opinion since the shortcut to find desired keywords on certain issues is not available. The quickest thing to do with printed
news
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 is scan the headlines and skim a few paragraphs of them, but it is definitely not as effective as inputting shortcuts on online
news
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 media. The ease offered by reading
news
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 from the
internet
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 will be suitable for
people
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 with packed schedules and leave print
newspapers
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 behind.
Second,
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newspapers
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 will not be able to publish hard
news
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 as fast as online journalists.
For example
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, the coverage of sports events
such
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 as the Olympics, the Euro Cup, the Champions League, and many other time-sensitive events will be established on the
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day of the actual activities.
Consequently
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,
people
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 search for the fastest alternatives to fulfil their curiosity regarding the events. That's why readers will not bother to spend extra money the following day to obtain
information
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 they have already consumed from the
internet
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.
To conclude
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, I disagree that
people
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 still rely on printed papers to gain
information
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recently
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, especially accounting
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 the growing popularity of digital media. Online newsrooms exist to satisfy consumers' needs to read
news
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 seamlessly and quickly. To catch up with these issues, printed
newspapers
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 are encouraged to establish their own digital
news
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 outlets.
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