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Today in many countries people are living in a throwaway society where things are used for a short time and then throw away. What do you think is the cause and what problems will it lead to ?

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In recent times, people have argued that a lifestyle like
throwaway
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a throwaway
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 society is modern and ordinary without the awareness that it brings several drawbacks. I will show
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the reasons
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 and consequences of throwaway society in
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 essay. On the one hand,
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 problem results from
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the characteristics
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 of
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humans
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 and the high productivity of
industry
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industries
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 or companies.
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, in the past until now most people have had a habit that when they
recieved
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receive
 a new thing
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 of the old one, they may throw the old thing into the rubbish or give it to others.
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, a child when he is given a novel toy by their parents
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may forget the other toys, even never use them once more times.
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, several companies with many products published make users want to buy and experience all of them.
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, the consumers purchase
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a quantity of
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products with
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 same function which
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 to
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utilize
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 it in a short time
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 to another and after a long time it becomes a habit
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them
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.
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,
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in
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the quality
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 of
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. First of all, when consumers waste too many products resulting in
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plastic
released
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to
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into
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 nature
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it takes large efforts of scientists and
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the government
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 to solve
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.
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, when there
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 a huge consumption, the producers will try to improve productivity, so a great deal of materials may be exploited leading to the safe of many animals. If people do not resolve it
these plastic
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 may harm
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several creatures
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 as habitats of ocean and forest animals. Specifically,
a
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 article shows that a whale died after it
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 plastics
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 of
their foods
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its food
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 and another report shows that some creatures
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risks
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 to extinct because their habitats are destroyed by
human
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humans
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. In
conclusion
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 throwaway society results from the humanity and competition or productivity of companies, and
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 problem
affected
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negatively in the existence of some animals.

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task response
The essay addresses the issue and provides some relevant points, but the response lacks depth and clarity. It would benefit from a more comprehensive exploration of the causes and consequences to fully address the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a basic structure, but there are some issues with the logical flow of ideas and lack of a clear introduction and conclusion. Consider organizing the ideas more coherently and providing a stronger introduction and conclusion to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and may benefit from using a wider variety of words and expressions to convey ideas more effectively. Consider incorporating more diverse and precise vocabulary to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
The essay shows a reasonable control of grammar and sentence structure, but there are some errors in sentence formation and verb tense consistency. Work on improving sentence structure and ensuring consistent and accurate use of verb tenses to enhance grammatical range.
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