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The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce garden fertilizer (compost). Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce garden fertilizer (compost). Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 process diagram shows how a plastic
container
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 can be used to turn everyday
waste
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 into compost at home. In the first step, a large plastic
container
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 with a volume of two metric cubes should be prepared. The
container
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 must have holes on the sides in order to allow air circulation.
Next,
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everyday
waste
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 is added to the jar. The ideal amount of
waste
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 is a combination of equal proportions of grass and food and a small addition of newspaper. If the jar used has measurements similar to that in the diagram, that would about to about 15cm of grass and 15cm of food with a bit of newspaper. The sequence of the
waste
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 disposal is not indicated, but it is essential
to
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apply

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not to overfill with
waste
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 and leave plenty of space.
Then
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, additional ingredients are added to
faciliate
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facilitate

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the composting process. The recommended additions are
nitrogren
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nitrogen

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and water. It is crucial to make sure that the water is hot in order to allow the magic to happen. After that, the top of the
container
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 is sealed and set aside to allow the heat to escape through the air holes
while
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 the composting begins. In the final step, the results are shown after about six months. Compared to the image in
previous
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the previous

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 steps, the size of the particles in the compost is much smaller and the volume is less. Now the compost is ready to be used in the garden.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words container, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycle
  • organic waste
  • garden fertilizer
  • compost
  • diagram
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • overview
  • collection
  • shredding
  • mixing
  • addition
  • water
  • bacteria
  • turning
  • aerating
  • pile
  • maturation
  • filtering
  • final product
  • before and after
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