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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing debate about whether
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 penalties should be allowed for serious crimes or not. Certainly, the effectiveness of
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 type of
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 is notable.
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, in
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 essay, I will discuss these distinct viewpoints and explain why I strongly believe that
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 legal action should be continued.
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 with, we need to realize the benefits brought by the existence of capital
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.
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, even if some wicked
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 schemed to murder others for their own purposes, if they understood that there was a possibility that they would need to compensate for their violations by
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, they would be less likely to carry out those plans.
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 is because they can easily imagine that the entire cost to carry out serious illegal action will not exceed the total satisfaction they can obtain by doing so.
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, if there is no cost to pay when their illegal behaviours are recognized by the police, those
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 will execute their schemes as soon as possible because they can achieve their own purposes without any sacrifice.
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, the existence of capital
punishment
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 is meaningful and essential for us to protect our society.
On the other hand
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, as some
people
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 argue, giving
death
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 to criminals is somehow immoral. As they potentially consider, the behaviour of taking somebody’s
life
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 should be regulated rigidly because there is no alternative to
life
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.
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, if someone dies for any reason, that
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 ends at that point, and even if we wish to redeem that
life
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 again, that dream will never come true because of the nature of
life
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. In fact, there are still risks as could be seen in the case where it becomes obvious that the person who received
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 extreme sentence did not commit any crime, after the execution of penalties.
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, it is
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 true that
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 the existence of
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 extreme
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, some illegal behaviours are not practised because
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 are afraid of
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, and they acknowledge that
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 principle is unavoidable.
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, having laws which explicitly mention that
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 penalties exist against extremely serious criminals is one of the most effective ways to create and maintain a peaceful community. In conclusion,
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 there are some opinions that the implementation of capital
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 is morally questionable, it is true that we are able to prevent some crimes beforehand.
For
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 reason, I suppose that
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 type of
punishment
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 should be kept and applied to serious cases.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has clear main ideas. Some points need more support.
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Provide more specific examples to help strengthen your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your conclusion clearly restates your opinion and sums up your key points.
task achievement
You present both views of the argument well and express your opinion clearly. Your introduction states the purpose clearly.
coherence and cohesion
You have a solid structure with clear paragraphs that discuss different ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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