You live in a block of flats; your neighbour makes a lot of noise which has caused problems for you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: explain the situation tell him/her how you are effected by this Suggest what you want the landlord to do.

Dear Landlord, I am
here to
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writing a letter to tell you that my neighbour makes a lot of noise and it causes problems for me. My husband and I need to wake up very early in the morning,we usually sleep at 10pm but when we fall asleep,the neighbour closes the door very loudly and
he
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starts to turn on the television.My husband and I always wake up at
this
time and cannot sleep back,when the time is long,our minds become very stressed and unhappy,we can't get good results in work we have been affected by
this
. We had tried to tell him our
problem
,but he did not try to solve the
problem
,so
that is
why I am here to write
this
letter to you.I hope you will help me to solve
this
problem
,I think you should talk to him to make less noise and not to turn on the television too loudly,If the
problem
does not stop,we are trying to call the police to help us,so please help us to solve the problems immediately. We await good news with patience. Yours faithfully,
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task response
Provide clearer details about the specific noise issues and their impact on your daily life. Be specific about the problems the noise is causing. Also, focus on the suggestion for resolving the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly and use appropriate paragraphing. Try to use appropriate linking words and cohesive devices to make the letter more coherent.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and varied vocabulary to express your ideas effectively.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure, word forms, and accuracy in grammar. Also, use a wider variety of sentence structures to demonstrate a good command of English grammar.
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