The table below gives information on concusmer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
The given table provides information about the percentage of different types of goods (several types of foods, fashion, and leisure or education) consumed by
people
in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey for one year in 2002. In general, the most expenditure was put on food
items, while
the lowest was on leisure or education.
To begin
with, The Turkish consumed the most percentage of consumption with 32% of food
/drinks/tobacco, followed by the Irish who spent 28.91% of
different types of Change preposition
on
food
. Spanish, Italian and Sweden people
, consumed 18.80%, 16.36%, and 15.77% respectively. While
,
Remove the comma
apply
people
in those countries expended their money on fashion about three to four times less than food
items. Italian spent the biggest percentage of fashion with 9.00%, Change preposition
on food
while
Turkish, Spanish, and Irish consumed 6.63% ,6.51%, 6,43
%, and of Correct word choice
and 6,43
this
respectively.
Meanwhile, expenditure on leisure or education things always placed below 5%. Turkish, Sweden Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
, Italian, Irish, and Spanish expended 4.35%, 3.22%, 3.20%, 2.21%, and 1.98% respectively.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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