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Band 4

You recently starting commuting to work by bicycle and discoverd that there is problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building where you work write a letter to the building say Explain the reason for using a bicycle to commute what problem have you encountered with parking? What are your recommendation to solve them?

Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
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for
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 draw your attention
my
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to my
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 name is
ahmed
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Ahmed
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 and
i
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I
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 am working
is
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in
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a grapic
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grapic
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graphic
designing
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 office. I have facing some problems
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last
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the last
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 few days regarding
bicycle
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 parking. Let you know some faculty didn't have the other vehicle
expect
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except
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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.
Also
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,
i
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I
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 am using the
bicycle
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. I would like to tell you about
parking
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the parking
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 issue the office parking is not wide. Sometimes when
i
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I
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arrived
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my
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at my
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 duty place parking not space
there
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and i does laydown my
bicycle
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 on the floor
due to
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 not
enough
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 space. The parking only cars and
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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.
Furthermore
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,
some times
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sometimes
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 parking didn't park
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 in the parking . I would like to suggest you please arrange
the
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another parking for
bicycle
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 vehicles
however
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, people couldn't
facing
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the
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Parking problems. And look after the
safty
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safety
 just like do for other
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 parked on the permisses . I am hoping for
a supportive
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support
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. Yours sincerely, Ali.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter is structured properly with clear paragraphs and logical flow of ideas. Separate the introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter. Maintain a professional tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
Ensure clear and complete response to all parts of the task. Address the reason for using a bicycle, the problems with parking, and provide recommendations in a clear and cohesive manner.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and improve the coherence of ideas to express yourself more effectively. Use formal vocabulary and expressions appropriate for a formal letter.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure, punctuation, and grammar to improve clarity and accuracy. Proofread the letter for grammatical errors and ensure proper use of tense and sentence structure.
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