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The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
#bar #olympic #medals #twelve #countries
the bar chart gives us information about the total
number
 of
olympic
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Olympic
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golde
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gold
,silver,
bronze
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and bronze
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medals
 won by 12 different countries ,
overall
 it can be seen that
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the
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USA have the greatest
number
 of
medals
.others
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other
 countries get a few
medals
. refers to
USA
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the USA
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 where have own the
big
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largest
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number
 of
medals
such
 as USA , it has more than 550 gold
medals
 , about silver gift it owns about 1550 ,and
the
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a
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 large
numbers
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number
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 of bronze
medals
 around 25000
.
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This
this
number
 for
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the
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soviet union
is
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apply
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decerased
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decreased
for
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by
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approximateely
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approximately
 400 gold, below 1000 silver, and for bronze
medals
 just it has 1000
medals
.
however
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however,
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 people in
china
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China
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as well as
japan
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Japan
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 has a lower
number
 of
medals
that
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than
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 both of them with all type of
medals
 does not
reache
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reach
500
medals
.
regards to
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Regarding
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others site
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other sites
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 in the
would
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world
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 like
uk
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UK
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,
franch
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France
,german,.....
this
 amount of
medals
 where they have under 1000
medals
 . they have
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a
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fairly similar
number
 .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, medals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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