The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

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number

olympic

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Olympic

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golde

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gold

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bronze

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and bronze

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medals

won by 12 different countries ,

overall

it can be seen that

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the

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USA have the greatest

number

medals

.others

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other

countries get a few

medals

. refers to

USA

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the USA

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where have own the

big

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largest

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number

medals

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as USA , it has more than 550 gold

medals

, about silver gift it owns about 1550 ,and

the

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large

numbers

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number

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of bronze

medals

around 25000

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This

this

number

for

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soviet union

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apply

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decerased

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decreased

for

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approximateely

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approximately

400 gold, below 1000 silver, and for bronze

medals

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medals

however

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people in

china

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China

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as well as

japan

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Japan

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has a lower

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medals

that

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than

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both of them with all type of

medals

does not

reache

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reach

500

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regards to

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Regarding

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others site

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other sites

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in the

would

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world

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franch

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France

,german,.....

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

154 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have changed your job describe your new job tell him/her your other news

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