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The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
#bar #olympic #medals #twelve #countries
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the bar chart gives us information about the total
number
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 of
olympic
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Olympic
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golde
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gold
,silver,
bronze
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and bronze
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medals
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 won by 12 different countries ,
overall
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 it can be seen that
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the
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USA have the greatest
number
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 of
medals
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.others
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other
 countries get a few
medals
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. refers to
USA
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the USA
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 where have own the
big
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largest
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number
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 of
medals
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such
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 as USA , it has more than 550 gold
medals
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 , about silver gift it owns about 1550 ,and
the
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a
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 large
numbers
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number
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 of bronze
medals
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 around 25000
.
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This
this
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number
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 for
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the
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soviet union
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decerased
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decreased
for
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by
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approximateely
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approximately
 400 gold, below 1000 silver, and for bronze
medals
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 just it has 1000
medals
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.
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however
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however,
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 people in
china
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China
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as well as
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japan
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Japan
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 has a lower
number
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 of
medals
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that
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than
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 both of them with all type of
medals
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 does not
reache
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reach
500
medals
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.
regards to
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Regarding
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others site
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other sites
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 in the
would
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world
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 like
uk
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UK
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,
franch
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France
,german,.....
this
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 amount of
medals
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 where they have under 1000
medals
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 . they have
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a
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fairly similar
number
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 .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, medals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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